First Draft Feedback

First Draft Feedback

Here are some responses to the first draft of our film, Evasion. We used some questions which would help us to develop for the final draft, which is to be handed in 15/3/13
Do you feel the atmosphere we created suited genre conventions? Why?
- If it was action then yes, due to the fast paced music and editing
- Yes, suited the action genre
- Music fit well with conventions but the weather didn't
- The use of a character talking over the top helped
- Yes, the sound fits the action atmosphere
- Not intense enough, music not tense enough

What are your opinions on the way in which we introduced the names?
- It was very good, but it would be better spread out across the film
- Liked the idea, but the credits need spreading out more
- Good idea, try to use a few during the running scene
- Worked at the start, but it didn't during the running
- Good, maybe do it throughout rather than just at the beginning
- Good but possibly too slow
- We liked it but it didn't fit well with the rest
- Looked good but didn't fit with the rest of it

Is the narrative of our film clear and understandable?
- Yes, but unsure as to who is the protagonist and antagonist
- Yes, would watch the full film
- Yes, easy to understand
- No because the start couldn't be heard and then it suddenly cut to the chase
- Running needs to be shown more to show what he's done wrong
- Yes
- No

Were the characters clear as to who was the protagonist and antagonist?
If not, why?
- No, because all we see it two people running
- Yes, although it was hard to realize as the beginning was quiet
- Not really
- No, was the person getting chased the bad guy?
- Yes
- No

How could we improve for our final draft?
- Spread the credits out more, and make the beginning louder
- Spread the credits out a little, make the beginning clearer
- Improve the quality of sound at the start
- Freeze frames to introduce characters, Text on running
- Move the text
- Louder speaking at the start and end
- Music needs to be more intense and show why he's been chased
- Change the clothes to fit characters and add more effects



From this feedback I am going to take and use some of these suggestions in my final edit of the film. I am going to use freeze frames or a slow-mo effect to introduce titles and the start part will be scrapped, as it doesn't fit.